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     The sand beneath his feet tastes like glass and bitterness; he knows because the wind rips through the undulating hills, sloughs off a layer of dune-skin and forces him to swallow every time. His eyes feel heavy, sight is blurred beneath the crust of sand in his eyelashes. He longs to rub it off, but knows that if he does the tiny grains will cling to his eye and pain will sit there for the rest of the day, tormenting him. So he leaves it, and pretends it doesn't matter.

     Instead he concentrates on the burn of unrelenting sun on his shoulders, his neck. Walking in this landscape he marvels at the bleak beauty; three colours - gold, azure blue and grey. Grey in the tired bushes that cling to the sand determined to survive. Azure blue above and around him, like a single eye pressed close to a tiny landscape to watch him breathe. Gold beneath his feet, around his home.

     He doesn't know why he lives here, where the thought of water is like a whisper on the wind - listen and it's gone. A single black mouth in the side of a dune and that's all the home he knows. Maybe one day he'll walk, walk away from the shallow cave, the baking rocks, the watching sky. Maybe. Here, though, he is a tiny being in a tiny world, watched by a blue sky empty of life or knowledge.
©2009 ~findmeastorm
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The result of a FlashLit prompt - 'Desert Dweller' became this. I was asked to post it, so ... straight into 'general fiction' where most of my work goes because I don't know where else to put it.

Critique appreciated.

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:iconxburiedinblackx:
Here's the :+fav: I promised :P

I love this, as you already know.

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Yes, I am a dreamer. For a dreamer is one who can make his way by moonlight, and see the dawn before the rest of the world. ~Oscar Wilde
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Hahaha, thank you again! :D

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find me a storm where the wild winds blow.
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With only a short amount of time to write with, I'd say this is a fine effort - It would still be a fine effort even without the constraints. The imagery is lovely, and the narration gives us just enough sense of character. Well done

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"If we, citizens, do not support our artists, then we sacrifice our imagination on the altar of crude reality and we end up believing in nothing and having worthless dreams" - Yann Martel
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Thank you very much. Once I get over the initial panic of 'Argh! Tag!', I can settle down and write at least some description I'm not too ashamed of. :D

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find me a storm where the wild winds blow.
:iconxburiedinblackx:
You're welcome... again. =D

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Avatar by =FallenZephyr.

Yes, I am a dreamer. For a dreamer is one who can make his way by moonlight, and see the dawn before the rest of the world. ~Oscar Wilde
:iconeclipseattwilight:
Yeah, the initial shock of the time limit gives way, thankfully :D

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"If we, citizens, do not support our artists, then we sacrifice our imagination on the altar of crude reality and we end up believing in nothing and having worthless dreams" - Yann Martel

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